Wednesday, December 26, 2007

i.
so quiet
at your place; so hard
to fall asleep

ii.
rolling into you,
into the middle; time's up
10 y.o. mattress

Ian Row

2 comments:

Pilgrim said...

try this - more succinct (and sexy)

10 y.o. mattress
rolling into you

Hot Cross Haiku said...

hi jeff, thx for the comment. so, how does the rest of the haiku read? i put 'mattress' at the end bec that was the 'surprise'. anyway, i was hoping to read your blog but i think i need an invitation... ;-)